Category Archives: Warmaiden

I’m Batting .000

If you recall from my PPWC recap, I pitched Warmaiden twice. Through some miracle I managed to land four requests for the full manuscript from those two pitches. How? Well, check that post for the details.

That was April. Now to fast forward to today.

The final rejection from those four requests rolled into my inbox today.

Of the three agents that requested materials, two of them sent me very nicely worded rejection letters for the novel. One of them sent me nothing, even after I sent a polite follow-up email. Nada. Zip. Zilch. I could go on a tear about responding to people you meet at conferences (as opposed to those pseudo-anonymous queries) as the polite thing to do, but I don’t see that as being productive. I’m assuming the “no response after almost four months means a solid, ‘No Thanks.'”

The one editor that requested materials from me also sent me a rejection a few days ago. He gave me some really sound advice and some great pointers on what to improve in my work. He didn’t have to do that. He’s a really nice fellow for taking time from his busy schedule to give me four paragraphs of feedback rather than a simple, “No.” Good on him. If you’re that editor, and you’re reading this, you know who you are. To you, I say, “Thanks!”

I’ve taken his advice to heart and am already working toward learning what I need to in order to improve upon the weaknesses he pointed out in my writing. I’m not quite ready to delve into the serious revisions of the story just yet. More learning and help from friends is necessary first.

This has been a rough time for me. So much time and energy has gone into something that may end up in that proverbial trunk. I’ve accepted the fact that this novel may go nowhere. That I may strike out again and again if I refuse to let it go.

I’m not ready to let it go just yet. I’m willing to step up to the plate and take another swing with the novel.

Will I end up continuing my streak of batting a solid .000? Will I hit that home run? Will it be a “game winning” chance at the plate?

I don’t know yet.

That’s why I’m not giving up.

Until I know for sure the project is dead, I can’t bring myself to resign.


I’m not participating in NaNoWriMo this year. It’s not because I don’t believe in the process of encouraging writers. It’s because I have different plans this year!

I’ve decided to submit Warmaiden to one agent or editor each day in the month of November. I’m calling this National Novel Submission Month. Or… wait for it… NaNoSubMo!

I even went so far as to register a domain name for my efforts. If they pay off, I may expand the site into something people can register for and track their own queries. We’ll see if I get that deep into my insanity! You can follow my efforts of November over at

Warmaiden Revisions Done

I’ve finished revising Warmaiden. I gave myself 10 days to do it and it only took a total of 6. I’m quite happy with myself. That gives me hope that once I get it in front of a willing agent/editor, I can do whatever changes they ask of me in record time. Now to run it through the CSFWG and see what changes they ask of me….

















Of course, I did another Wordle of the book, and the results were much better than last time. Laurin is still my main word, but the sizing of her name is much smaller in relation to the rest of the words in the image.


Revisions of Warmaiden

I’m working my way through the book again doing some touch ups and minor revisions (with some major work in places) to tighten up the prose before sending it through the CSFWG again. I started working on it last Thursday. Every spare moment that I’ve managed to grab has been poured into the revision process. This includes lunch, nap times for the kid, downtime right before bed and every other moment that I can think of. At lunch today, I managed to get within 39 pages of finishing the revisions, and I can’t wait to be done.

Having gone through the book again, I’ve fallen in love with it all over again. Little nuances that I’ve planted in the book leaped from the page at me, and I found myself smiling at the adventures of Laurin, Gerra, Sigri, Raullin and all of the others in their quest to defeat Xanathos and return home safely to Caer Saberi.

I can’t wait to get the book back in front of the CSFWG and see what they have to say on the matter.

Wordle for Warmaiden :: 2011-06-08

There’s a great web site out there for writers called Wordle. You can upload your text, and it’ll output a Java display that you can print or screen shot that will show you the density of the various words that you use. The larger the word in the image, the more times you’ve used it in the text. Here’s my Wordle for Warmaiden as of yesterday:


Wordle for Warmaiden -- 2011-06-07

As you can see, I’ve used “Laurin” a wee bit too much throughout the 108,000 words of Warmaiden. I expected the name to be the largest since she’s my protagonist. I didn’t expect it to be that large, though. Time for some more edits to remove character filtering and “gawking narrator”. Once I’m done with the edits in a week or two, I’ll upload a new image and we can compare the progress and improvements.

Partial Rejected

I’ve neglected my web site for the past two months and it shows. I have news about the partial that was requested by the agent: rejection. I’m not sure why it was rejected because all I received was a form letter with a customized apology for not being interested. I wish I knew why it was turned down, but I guess I’ll never know. I’m fully aware that agents are way too busy for follow-up emails and advice to people (other than their clients) and such. I’m not going to pester the agent about her choice. I’ll just accept it and move on.

The rejection was almost two months ago, and I haven’t really written much since then. It’s not because of the rejection… that only bummed me out for a few days. It’s just that life caught up to me and I haven’t had the time I used to have to dedicate to writing. I know that’s a lame excuse, but I’m using it for the moment.

I do feel the itch to write coming back very strongly, so in the very near future, I’ll carve out some time for myself and get back to writing at the furious pace that I’m accustomed to.

Partial Requested

I’m currently doing a massive happy dance (mostly internalized at the moment) because I met a great agent today. I pitched my book to her, and she readily jumped on the chance to see a partial submission (the first 30 pages) of my book, WARMAIDEN.

I’ve learned quite a bit at this weekend’s PPW Conference, and one of the things I found out is that my first two pages were all backstory that needed to be shown instead of told. I knew better than to do this, but I wrote it that way anyways. It’s time to yank out the two pages of telling and replace them with a FULL CHAPTER that will be my new first chapter of the book that shows what I told.

This means that I can’t immediately send off the first 30 pages. I have some work to do first. That work will take me about 3-4 hours, and I strongly feel that I’ll be able to sneak in those hours by the end of Monday night and get the submission off to the agent by that time.

Until I get a chance to sit at a keyboard and crank out the new first chapter, I’m busy floating on cloud nine in the happiness of knowing that my story has captured the interest of a professional in the field.

First Round of Revisions

I started my first round of revisions on WARMAIDEN last week, and they are going quite well. I’ve only had to add 300 words total. Well, that’s the delta. I’ve removed quite a few and added a little more than what I’ve removed. I just finished all revisions of chapter 1-3 (the book is 20 chapters total.) My critique group in the CSFWG has critiqued through chapter 13 in their hands. I hope to be done with those revisions before they receive chapter 14 later this month. The overall flow of the story has not changed a bit, but the prose supporting the story is much strong and works very well. I can’t wait to see what they have to say about chapters 4-6 (which is my next section.) I’ll probably start those tomorrow during lunch.

Ozey! Ozey! Ozey!

I am VERY HAPPY to announce that I just finished the first draft of my first book. It weighs in at 97,700 words. WARMAIDEN is finished! However, it’s not DONE. Now come the rewrites based on critiques from the CSFWG. From the feedback I’ve received so far, it’s not going to be that rough.

Been A While

It’s been a while since I’ve given anyone an update on the status of WARMAIDEN. The book is coming along nicely. At the end of NaNoWriMo in November, I was up to 60,000 words. Since that time I’ve crept up to 80,000 words, and I hope to be done around the 110,000 word mark. That’s probably at least two months away.

Once I’m all done with the writing, then comes time to go back through the book with a fine-toothed comb — and my critiques from the Colorado Springs Fiction Writer’s Group — and fix any glaring mistakes or problems with the manuscript. In a way, I’m looking forward to the edits. The main reason I’m looking forward to that part of the process is that it means that I’ve written a book. Finally.

I’m not naive enough to think that just because the book is written that it’s done and finished. Even once I’m done with the first round of edits, I’m not done with the book. I still have to land an agent, go through their editorial process (if any), get the book in front of a publisher, and go through their many rounds of edits, and finally get it printed and on a shelf. Until I see it sitting on a shelf on my local bookstore, I’m not considering the project completed.

Yeah… I’ve got a long ways to go.